First Draft and Feedback

Introduction

Hello everyone! Welcome back! Today I am continuing to talk about our first draft of our film. In addition, I will be talking about the feedback we received from our teacher on our film.

This was honestly the part I was anticipating. I was excited and scared to hear my teacher do a harsh and critical review of our first draft! I really thought she would rip us to shreds, but she gave us better critiques than I thought!

The Feedback We Received

• We needed to add more credits in our opening scene
• Need to incorporate theme music during Lizzy's conversation with Mercedes
• Higher Volume (voiceover during conversation)
• Needs to have obsessive passion 
• Theme music with lyrics that tells the story
• More backstory/exposition. For instance, a voiceover of Christine introducing herself and sharing her background with Mercedes.
• More sound effects
• Fonts in credits are too small, it doesn't match Christine's personality
• Better title slide, expressive visuals
• Better color theory, weird, whimsical colors that challenge conventions.
• No play editing slide
• Have better hook
• Yellowish color (filter) over bathroom scene
• Continued consistency at the end where the doors locked, and you hear dialogue with the closet, then Christine leaves the closet and says, "they're never gonna find her here!"
• One shot of Christine throwing Lizzy's bag with her cell phone in it, and as Mercedes frantically calls Lizzy and walks around, she sees Lizzy's bag and hears her phone ring

Reflection

To conclude, I was NOT expecting to hear those types of critiques. I thought I would hear more upsetting remarks, but those were all very understandable. I hear what my teacher is telling us to do in order to improve our film, and I know why she said the things she said. We got a good score for our first draft, and I am very complacent with what we got! I thought we were going to receive worse, but we did great. I would like to thank my teacher for giving us the push we needed to fix our film. :D Thanks for reading! Come back next time, where I share our FINAL FILM! P is logging off..